the subject is good but the angle is lacking because the character emotions is not visible and whipped away by strong lights coming from window ...... ill give it a good story telling but need a few adjustments ....... untel then take care of urself.
Diana looking out throught the bright window, us way back in the dark corridor looking at the scene. I think the composition works very well if one is willing to imagine what might be going on. The tones and contrast gives me clues to the mood you wanted to confer here as well.